This is the first chapter in my book (Short chapters) How do you like it (It is NOT about vampires!)?

I like it! I love the flow of the narration. I love the way it built the sudden suspense. I just think you could have been more specific abt what she saw outside the window rather than just saying : "A completely hollow translucent face. The face of horror."... because something as general as that is quite difficult to be afraid of.